I need an editor

I cannot express how much I love the story I’m writing.

A young man depressed from his recent break up ends up held hostage by an artificial intelligence who runs a simulation booth and is thruster into 9 different simulated lives in its attempt to help him out of his rut. He experienced living as a drug addicted architect, a science fiction hero, a mental hospital resident, and finally a person who has undergone death, until he finally realized that he is simply in the midst of circumstance and happy about it.

I just need someone to give me some interesting criticism. I need a few people actually. Anyone out there who wants to read a good book and pick at the not so good parts? It would be unpaid. But its a comfy hobby.

Comment below and let me know.
Stay comfy.